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Post by pokeria1 on Apr 20, 2008 13:34:31 GMT -5
this story was written to explain what happened to Misty's Parents, and how she ended up with Her sisters. Many things from this were based off of Star Wars, among other things, I also will attempt to explain the Bug phobia. Portions of this story will ALSO be referenced in the Water wars story.
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Chapter one
(Somewhere in a lake on a city-island far from the Kantonet, a bunch of red-haired, tall and slender humanoids, Misties, watch the birth of a misty. Among them is a green-tailed mermaid with long, flowing red hair. Someone nearby directs to the Mermaid and another Misty, as well as an extremely muscular humanoid, with a worried expression on his face.)
Misty guard: Ariel, Amakinai, your Majesty, you must come here, we have a dire emergency!
(The Mermaid, now known as Ariel, as well as the Muscular person known as Amakinai, and the King of all Misties, come towards the throne room that the guard directed him towards.)
King: Kasoumono, what is it? Is there something wrong?
(The guard then gives him dire news)
Guard: Mistphicles, your Majesty, we have a dire predicament! We must evacuate the newborn, as well as her parents, your Sister! We encountered some people saying that they plan on murdering members of the royal family of all of the founders in order to prove their superiority and conquer Pokeria!
Mistiphicles: What!? Can you tell me who these people look like?
Guard: All I can say is that they wore mostly black with a crimson R imbedded onto their shirts!
Mistiphicles: Very well, Amakinai, escort Mistonomy and Kanamo to a safe area to protect them from those Rockets.
Amakinai: (in almost a deep voice, while wearing a breathing apparatus underwater.), yes, your majesty!
Mistiphicles: Good, now we must try and help them survive.
(everyone leaves the room, except Ariel and Mistphicles)
Ariel: your Majesty, There’s been something troubling me lately in regards to Amakinai…
Mistphicles: hmm… somethings troubling you about your padawan? Please explain, Ariel.
Ariel: well, ever since he came back from the Pokerian Military HQ base at 2000 hours a few weeks ago, he wasn’t acting like himself. I mean, I know his race was nearly exterminated by an unknown attack, and he was one of the few survivors, but this time, he seems… threatening now, as though someone evil is now controlling him.
Mistphicles: Hmm, maybe someone mentioned something about his experience that he became irritable as a result? I do sense something troubling him, but let’s just hope that it isn’t something harsh enough for him to turn traitor. (a deep sadness shows in Mistiphicles face) Also, Ariel, there’s something you must promise me…
Ariel: what Is it, my lord. I’ll do anything you command me to do, I mean, it’s nothing more than payback for how the royal family helped us in the past.
Mistiphicles: If my newborn neice… Kasumianna, has survived the attack, but her parents end up dead, I want you to leave the baby at a different family.
Ariel: (she realizes) Is there a reason why, your majesty?
Mistiphicles: I just don’t want to see her murdered, and leaving her with the royal family will only endanger her more, and I don’t want any of my people to be murdered, so I want you to leave her at a human family, to protect her.
Ariel: If that is what you command, then I shall do my best to carry it out, your Majesty.
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Post by pokeria1 on May 7, 2008 16:55:38 GMT -5
Well, if anyone wants to give comments about this Fanfic, it will be much appreciated.
I'll try to get the next chapter of this fanfic as soon as my studies for the school year are finished (My school lets out on May the 23rd.)
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Post by ajnrules on May 7, 2008 22:35:45 GMT -5
Sorry, I've been away for a while, but I like it. Keep it up.
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Post by kasumi888 on May 8, 2008 16:12:13 GMT -5
I'd love to see more of that story. You're a really good writer. I really like to write too, and I was wondering if you maybe would want to write a fanfic with me, you know, one of us could write one chapter and the other person could write the next one and so on. I don't know, it was just an idea. Tell me what you think, pokeria1.
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Post by pokeria1 on May 10, 2008 6:52:42 GMT -5
I'd love to see more of that story. You're a really good writer. I really like to write too, and I was wondering if you maybe would want to write a fanfic with me, you know, one of us could write one chapter and the other person could write the next one and so on. I don't know, it was just an idea. Tell me what you think, pokeria1. As long as it isn't about Misty's history, it's fine with me. It can still be about Misty, but it cannot be about her history. I mean, no offense, Minimisty, but we kinda have conflicting views on the history of Misty, and if we did a joint fanfic involving Misty, well, there will be various contradictions. [eg. in each odd numbered chapter, Misty's Parents are still alive, whileas in each even numbered chapter her parents have taken the "Harry Potter" route {as in, they were murdered.}.] It's not necessarily you that's the problem, it's more my problem.
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Post by pokeria1 on May 11, 2008 16:43:51 GMT -5
Here's the latest chapter, everyone.
(Chapter two)
(As Ariel is swimming away, she is also recounting to herself some memories.)
Ariel: (Amakinai… I just wonder why he seems to have become, almost threatening. I have known him since he was a kid, when I, some Pokerian Army members, and some of the founding races came to his home planet.)
(Some ships descend to a planet’s surface. It was mainly a rocky, everwooded area, but there were forest fires, as well as destroyed towns. A ship unique to the others lands with them, it was shaped almost like the pointed ends of a trident. And the pilot of this ship is Ariel.)
Ariel: (We had heard from a bunch of scouts patrolling parts of the Milky Way Galaxy that there was an attack on a planet in close proximity to the Pokemon System, and most of it’s inhabitants, the Brutians, were wiped out. We went to the planet to see if there were any survivors of this horrific onslaught, and try to find out clues as to what group was responsible for this onslaught.)
(Ariel, some Misties, some Brocks, some Surges, some Sabrins, and some human Pokerian soldiers, investigated the area.)
Pokerian Soldier: Ariel! I found something! It resembles a vehicle that was destroyed by a brutian! It’s logo seems to be intact! I found what might be a clue!
Ariel: (running over) I must see this, this kind of carnage is horrible, whoever is responsible for this is going to pay for this act of evil! I can’t stand… for it!
Ariel: (We then discovered an emblem resembling a letter R in crimson from one of the culprit’s vehicles. But that wasn’t the only thing we discovered.)
(Ariel then hears a cry, and rushes towards one of the destroyed homes. She sees a male Brutian child crying and trying to help a mortally wounded Sabrin female.)
Young Amakinai: (Mother! Mother!)
Ariel: (Oh my gosh! Ensign Harry! Contact the Medical corps! We need medical attention to this Sabrin and this Brutian Child! Stat!)
Ensign Harry: Right Away, Ariel!
Ariel: (It was then that I discovered the boy named Amakinai. His mother had apparantly tried to protect him, thus resulting in fatal injuries on herself. She died not long afterwards. I then raised the Brutian child, and treated him as almost like an older sister treats a younger brother in areas without sibling rivalry, and I trained him in the art of combat and self defense. I then noticed that he had latent Psychic abilities, almost enough to be considered legendary. I tried to help him master it, and try to keep him from falling to the dark side of these abilities.)
(Flashback ends.)
Ariel: (He was a gentle soul, and can have quick outbursts of anger, and pretty much cherished life. But he also was feeling disturbed, from these memories as a kid when these invaders nearly wiped out his race. He tried to find out the root of this so he could stop this threat.)
(Meanwhile, At the Cerulean coast, Amakinai, Mistonomy, Kanamo, their newborn child, Kasumianna, and some Misty Guards have made it on the shore.)
Amakinai: Get them to a camp, I’ll stay here to be on look out, If there are any Rocket’s nearby, I’ll contact you.
Misty soldier: yes, Amakinai. Your highnesses, follow us.
(the Misty soldiers head towards a forest with the misty family.)
Misty Soldier: we should be safe here. If the Rocket soldiers manage to breach, we’ll be prepared. I, as well as my comrads, won’t let any members of the royal family die. We will die if it’s the only way to protect them.
(They set up camp, and the Parents, with Kasumianna, are with each other.)
Mistonomy: Kanako, my wife, promise me something.
Kanako: what is it?
Mistonomy: If the rockets get through all our defenses, I want you to take Kasumiana and get out of there.
Kanako: what? But, I can’t just abandon my husband… we promised to stay together.
Mistonomy: I know, it’s hard for me to have to resort to that as well. But I would rather see you alive as well as the baby than see you and the baby dead.
(Kasumianna croons and makes noises.)
(Later that night.)
Misty Soldier: it’s late, I still wonder what’s up with Amakinai lately. I hope he hasn’t been convinced by team rocket to betray us.
(just as these soldiers are talking, there are rockets marching to the forest.)
Misty soldier: I know, I know, ensign, but… wait… Shh! Somethings coming!
(they hear rustling in the trees and bushes, they then hear blasters.)
Misty Soldier: ALERT THE CAMP!! WE ARE UNDER ATTACK!! TEAM ROCKET’S ENTERING OUR CAMP! CREATE DEFENSIVE POSITIONS!! I REPEAT!! WE ARE UNDER ATTACK!! TEAM ROCKET’S ENTERING OUR CAMP! CREATE DEFENSIVE POSITIONS!!
(several rockets ambush the camp firing blasters, missile launchers, and are also rolling in with tanks and mechas. Some Rocket soldiers are killed, but not as many as the Misty soldiers.)
Misty Soldier (entering the place where the family is sleeping.) Your Majesty! The Camp is under attack by Team Rocket! You must get yourselves out of here! Many of our soldiers have been wiped out by these monsters! They are going to get you next!)
Mistonomy: I’ll hold them off, Kanamo, you get out of here with Kasumianna!
Kamano: I… (he looks at her with finality) …yes, Mistonomy.
(She runs out to get the child out of there, just as another Soldier runs in!)
Misty Soldier: Mistonomy! Amakinai… He’s …!
Misonomy: Amakinai has been killed?!
Misty Soldier: NO! Amakinai’s the reason why the Rocket’s even know where we are! He’s betrayed us!
Mistonomy: No, Amakinai, he couldn’t have… I will defend my daughter and my wife, even if it means killing an old friend to do so!
(He rushes out to fight the Treasonous Amakinai)
Mistonomy: (ignites lightsaber) AMAKINAI!!! I CAN’T LET YOU MURDER MY FAMILY!!!! TRAITOR!!!! COME ON OUT!!!!
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Post by pokeria1 on Jun 11, 2008 7:59:58 GMT -5
Sigh... Sorry for the triple post, but I haven't gotten a review since a month ago, and since the lifeline of a thread is usually a month, and I really want to post this fanfic, I needed to know reviews.
I'll post the 3rd chapter as soon as I can finish editing and uploading a video on youtube.
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Post by pokeria1 on Jul 11, 2008 16:16:54 GMT -5
Sorry for the quadruple post, and sorry if I sound immature, but... can't someone give a review for it. I do want to publish the next chapter, but I do want to see how everyone thought about this chapter. even if it IS a negative review, I'll handle it, since it's at least better than no review at all.
I plan to upload the next chapter next week, so I'd like you to try and comment on this current chapter by then.
Anyways, that's all for now.
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Post by pokeria1 on Jul 18, 2008 17:51:00 GMT -5
Well, I guess I'll post my next chapter up. However, next time, can you at least try to make time to review it, please? BTW, this is the chapter where Misty develops her phobia of Bug Pokemon.
(Chapter 3)
(Amakinai then comes out, but he also looks very different, not just in regards to wardrobe, but in regards to facial features. He now has an angered face, his eyes are shining red with white pupils.)
Amakinai: …. Mistonomy… I will avenge my race, by destroying you, your family, and many other pokerians! I also have… a new name.
(Amakinai and Mistonomy then duel. As best as Mistonomy, one of the best fighters of the Misties, tries to fight and defeat Amakinai, he can’t match Amakinai’s far more advanced lightsaber techniques. He is eventually impaled by Amakinai.)
Mistonomy: Kasumianna… Kanamo… I’m… Sorry… I… have… failed… (he then dies.)
(Ariel is meditating at the Seafoam Islands, when she suddenly senses the life force of one of the Misties depleting at a rapid rate.)
Ariel: gasp! Oh no! I must help them! (She then flies off towards the Cerulean coast)
Amakinai: General.
Rocket General: Yes, my lord?
Amakinai: contact the outside perimeter, apparantly the Mother and daughter have escaped. Shoot any bug pokemon nests so they can cause a stampede, and shoot them.
Rocket General: Right away, Lord Megatron.
Megatron: I have a hunch as to where they are, and I’ll teleport to them, and kill them.
(Amakinai, now called Lord Megatron, then teleports to an unknown location.)
(Meanwhile, Kamano and Kasumianna are running towards the exit.)
Kamano: Don’t worry, Kasumianna, we’re almost out, you’ll be safe. (I hope my husband is lurking nearby, I hope he didn’t get killed by the rockets.)
(Suddenly, she trips on a bare root. Kasumianna rolls on the forest floor, where there are nests of Weedles, Caterpies, Beedrils, Venonats, and possibly every bug type known on pokeria. Unfortunately, some Rocket Soldiers are on the trees, about to shoot at the nests to provoke the bug pokemon within.)
Rocket commander: NOW!
(They fire at the nests, and the bug pokemon flee in a frenzy and in panic. They swarm all over the forest floor, right where Kasumianna is sleeping., and the Rocket’s ready their machine guns.)
Kasumianna: (she wakes up, only to see a stampede of bug pokemon crawling around her. Terrified, she screams with terror, this experience will most likely haunt her for life.)
Kanamo: KASUMIANNA!!!
(Kanamo then runs to Misty in an attempt to rescue her from the bug pokemon. Then they make it out of the forest, but on the beach, they aren’t alone, nor safe.)
voice: going somewhere, Kanamo?
Kanamo: Amakinai? What…
(She turns around, and sees him, but she also notices the Rocket insignia on his shirt, and she realizes.)
Kanamo: No… you couldn’t have… why? Why would you betray us? Why would you betray the pokerians
Megatron: betray them? No, it’s the Pokerians that betrayed me! I found out from the Team Rocket Leader, Giovanni, that it was the Pokerians who nearly wiped out my race!
Kanamo: No, I swear we didn’t. Look, I won’t let you kill the baby. In fact, I would rather die than allow you to kill her. (she puts down Kasumianna, after telling her good-bye, and braces herself for the death blow.)
Megatron: consider it to be arranged!
(Megatron does a cross slash)
(Ariel then senses Kanamo’s life force being depleted as well.)
Ariel: (I must hurry, otherwise, none of the royal family members will survive!)
(Meanwhile, Megatron is with Kasumianna)
Megatron: Now… It’s your turn! Time to die!
Ariel: (Look’s like it’s now or never! I can’t reach her in time at this speed. I might have to use this.) Chaos Control!
(Ariel then warps to a super-fast speed, and aims for Kasumianna)
(Amakinai, or rather, Lord Megatron, is about to impale Kasumiana with his lightsaber, but suddenly, the baby disappears. The other Rockets look extremely confused, but Lord Megatron senses how the Misty child escaped and looks on a cliff near the lighthouse. Ariel is then seen holding Kasumiana, trying to comfort her, while at the same time, looking at Megatron.)
Megatron: Ariel… YOU!!!
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Post by ajnrules on Aug 12, 2008 20:09:37 GMT -5
Sorry for taking so long to post, but it's good. I like how you included the source of her entomophobia. Keep it up.
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Post by pokeria1 on Aug 13, 2008 16:27:07 GMT -5
Thanks,
I also have the next portion up. However, I won't be posting the next one yet, since I'm actually waiting until "TLM:AB" comes out, because of a. reasons similar to how Lucario's introduction in the series coincided with SSBB coming out in Japan (speaking of which, one of Ariel's techniques is based off of Lucario's Final Smash attack.), and B. to see how Athena died. Also, I originally had Megatron call Ariel his "Mistress", but I decided to change it to Mentor so that it won't be taken in the wrong context (mistress is an innuendo term meaning a woman who has a relationship with a married man who isn't said man's wife.).
(Chapter 4)
Ariel: Amakinai, Why… Why are you siding with them?!
Megatron: I am no longer Amakinai, I am Lord Megatron! And I am siding with Master Giovanni because Pokeria… Had BETRAYED me with their Lies!! On that day when I discovered Giovanni’s plans to kill all pokemon…
(It flashes back to a slick, black haired, business suit wearing man, Giovanni, working on a database containing some commands and a plan towards biological warfare towards pokemon. As soon as Amakiani (in a Pokerian commander outfit) enters the room, Giovanni puts away these plans.)
Amakinai: (Doctor. We’ve just received a report from Mistress Ariel. She has engaged the Team Rocket commander Crueado.)
Giovanni: (Then we can only hope that she is up to the challenge.)
Amakinai: (I still have terrible memories of my races destruction…)
Giovanni: (It’s upsetting to me to see that the Pokerians don’t seem to fully appreciate your talents or try to help answer your questions. Don’t you wonder why the founders won’t tell you the truth about the destruction of your race.)
Amakinai: (I wish I knew. More and more I get the feeling that they are hiding something about my past from me. I know there are things about the destruction of my race that they’re not telling me.)
Giovanni: (They don’t trust you, Amakinai. They see your future. They fear that you will be a danger. You must break through the fog of lies that the Pokerians have created around you. Let me help you to know about War and unimaginable powers.)
Amakinai: ((getting a bit suspicious) How do you know so much about this war, what unimaginable powers?)
Giovanni: (I had some hand in the war, and I myself have the founders powers. Sigh, I also made some pokemon… nonexistant.)
(Amakinai, shocked, then blocks Giovanni)
Amakinai: (you killed many of the pokemon?!)
Giovanni: (Amakinai… if one is to evolve and become perfect, one must sacrifice many lives, not just spare many lifeforms from dogmatic practices. If you wish to become a complete and wise leader… you must embrace a larger view of the Psi and try to sacrifice many inferior lifeforms.)
(Amakinai and Giovanni walk in circles as if about to duel.)
Giovanni: (Be careful of the Pokerians, Amakinai, only through our organization, and through me, can you achieve a power greater than any life form in existance. Learn to know the dark side of the PSI and learn to break the law of the founders in regards to killing pokemon and you will be able to learn how your race, the Brutians, were a victim of… Genocide, and stop the one behind it. (he smiles.))
Amakinai: (what did you say?)
Giovanni: (Join us, use my knowledge, I beg of you…)
(Amakinai takes out his blaster and his lightsaber, and ignites the lightsaber and points it a few inches near Giovanni’s neck and aims his blaster at Giovanni’s temple)
Amakinai: (You’re the master mind of the attacks, you’re the Boss of Team Rocket!)
Giovanni: (I know what’s been troubling you, listen to me. Don’t continue to be a pawn of the Pokerians, ever since I met you, I’ve known that you have been searching for answers for what happened to your race. Answers to your race’s decimation. (walks away.) Are you going to kill me?)
Amakinai: (I would, to avenge the pokemon and humans you hurt in your lust for power.)
Giovanni: (I know you would want to. I can FEEL your hatred. It gives you focus. It makes you stronger.)
Amakinai: ((relaxing and turning off lightsaber and putting it and the gun away.) I’m going to turn you over to General Oak, and to the council.)
Giovanni: (Of course, you should. But you don’t know of their intentions, do you?)
Amakinai: (I will quickly discover the truth of all this.)
Giovanni: (You have great wisdom, Amakinai, know the powers of darkness, learn of the Pokerians responsible for the decimation of her race.)
Megatron: That day, I learned from him that the Pokerians were responsible for the destruction of many of my people! I then went into power and became Lord Megatron and served my eternal Master. I have done many things by my hand, including killing the Marowak in lavender town.)
(flashback ends.)
Ariel: (Horrified and angered at Amakinai’s change of heart, especially because of deception from a high ranking official from the Pokerian Army.) I… I can’t… I can’t believe you… You killed many innocent lives because you believed a lie told to you!?
Megatron: Grrgh! He didn’t lie. He told me what happened!
Ariel: I know that it was a lie since the Pokerian Army sent me me and several soldiers to Brutia AFTER it was attacked to find survivors, and besides which, one of our men found a wrecked tank bearing the Rocket Logo on there! And also, I personally experienced trickery placed on me, by Ursula.
Megatron: He didn’t lie!
Ariel: You allowed this… Dark lord to play you into his hands until now… you’ve become the very thing you’ve sworn to stop! I can’t…
Megatron: I don’t fear the dark side, unlike you, old Mentor! Don’t you dare try and trick me. I have brought freedom! Justice! Peace! And Security to my new empire!
Ariel: Your new empire?
Megatron: Don’t make me kill you!
Ariel: Amakinai, my allegiance is to the Republic, to humanity, to Democracy!
Megatron: If you aren’t with me, then you are my enemy!
Ariel: Sigh, I may disagree with your viewpoints, but that doesn’t make me your enemy. (with a sense of defeat) I will do what I must, though, for Pokeria, and for humanity.
(Ariel takes out her lightsaber)
Megatron: you will try.
(Ariel ignites her lightsaber)
Megatron: Gyaaagh!!!
(Megatron ignites his and backflips and rushes towards Ariel, as they have the duel that determines the fate of Misty, as well as the fate of Pokeria)
(Megatron tries to hack at Ariel, whileas Ariel blocks Megatron. Megatron then kicks Ariel. They then enter an automated base ship where Megatron grabs her arm and is about to strike her, but she manages to block it. Then their lightsabers cut through some of the walls, and Ariel blocks one of his attacks, and the connected lightsabers hit a control device on the ship. Megatron then grabs Ariel’s neck, grabs her saber hand, and forces her lightsaber near her neck. However, Ariel then kicks Megatron in the behind with enough force to knock him back. Ariel and megatron then get up, and megatron rushes at Ariel, and kicks her back, also knocking back her lightsaber. Ariel then does the same thing towards Megatron when he rushes at her. Ariel then telekinetically pulls her lightdsaber towards her, and megatron pulls his lightsaber towards him, and blocks Ariel’s blow, and struggles to knock it back. He successfully knocks it back and then they exchange swipes towards each other, then their sabers connect, and then Ariel and Megatron attempt to telekinetically push the other towards the walls, but it ends up sending them both back. Megatron then rushes towards Ariel to deliver a fatal blow. But Ariel gets out of the way and blocks it, causing Megatron to hit the controls instead, which causes the engines of the baseship to fail. They then exit the ships interior exchanging blows, and the ship is coming close towards Mt Ember’s crater. They then exchange blows on the deck of the failing ship, and Megatron kicks Ariel in the chin. They then reach one of the weather vanes of the ship, which are in integrigal instability due to crashing near a river of lava just outside of the crater. Each one is trying to balance on the deteriorating vanes. They exchange blows, thus nearly causing them to fall off. Ariel jumps down to the wing that’s connected to the ship. Megatron jumps after her. They then grab each other in a half-nelson. They then balance on the already deteriorating wing as eruptions are coming in the distance. One of the lava eruptions hits the wing, thus increasing it’s rate of deterioration. They then rush to parts of the safe spots on the wing, doing one last attempt at hacking/blocking before waiting it out. the part of the wing that they are on then collapses into the river of lava, and they rush up, exchanging blows along the way. They then hang on to the gratings on the wing as they exchange blows through climbing, As Ariel holds onto Kasumianna tightly. As they are nearing the lava fall that connects with the sea, Ariel and Megatron exchange lightsaber blows towards each other. They then grab on to cables that used to be fuel lines towards the wing and start swinging and slashing each other like Pirates on ropes. Ariel then spots a hover-raft and jumps towards it, avoiding the super-heated water. Megatron then realizes what was happening and goes towards the wing and runs towards the edge and jumps it, jumping by luck onto a mining robot. The wing sinks (or melts) into the ocean/lava mix, and Megatron’s robot platform goes towards Ariel and Kasumianna and then Ariel and Megatron exchanges blows yet again. they then pause.)
Ariel: I have failed you, Amakinai. I have failed you.
Megatron: I should have known that Pokeria was behind the genocide of my people!
Ariel: Amakinai, Doctor Giovanni is evil!
Megatron: from what I can tell, it’s the Pokerians and pokemon that are evil!
Ariel: Well, Then you aren’t yourself!
Megatron: This is the end for you, my mentor.
(They exchange blows towards each other, their lightsabers connect, and Ariel backflips on a shore far from Kanto.)
Ariel: it’s over, Amakinai. I have the high ground.
(Megatron isn’t willing to give up and fail what Giovanni has ordered for him to do. His hate controlling him) Megatron: You underestimate my power!
Ariel: Don’t try it.
(Megatron jumps, and Ariel impales him just a few inches to the left of his gut. Which knocks him back towards the sea. Ariel puts away her lightsaber)
Ariel: I still couldn’t believe you would commit these atrocities! Why? What would make you believe that man’s lies, Megatron?!
Megatron: I… will… do… what… my master… ordered me… to do… and that… is to kill… KASUMIANNA!!!!! AND I WILL… KILL EVEN… MY MERMAID… MENTOR… SHOULD SHE… STAND IN MY WAY!!!!
(Megatron get’s up, and rushes at Ariel and tackles her, they then are resorting to punches and kicks, one out doing the other. They then reach a rocky area with a ravine, where Megatron then surprises Ariel by grabbing her and the baby, and he starts crushing them between his great arms With their screaming in pain.)
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Post by pokeria1 on Aug 23, 2008 21:09:18 GMT -5
Hey, umm... hate to be a pain, but... I may be waiting for Ariel's Beginning to be released (which, due to... (Ahem), complications, the next chapter may be delayed until friday (I don't want to end up using Youtube, and I have schoolwork to do), but that doesn't mean that I don't want replies, so... If you have any comments towards this latest chapter (and maybe all the other chapters you might have missed), I'd suggest you mention them now.
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Post by pokeria1 on Aug 26, 2008 20:24:38 GMT -5
Ok, Turns out that we were able to rent Ariel's Beginning after all, so I am able to get this on schedule after all. Here's the next chapter for The Birth of Misty (also, the struggle is also based off of the climax of "Broly: Second Coming")
(Chapter 5)
Ariel: I cannot give up… I… I… Swore… to… protect the… royal family… and I will… make sure I… do… just… that… with… Kasumianna!
(She then kicks Megatron in the gut.)
(Ariel breaks loose of Megatron’s crushing grip and lands a few meters with the Misty baby)
Ariel: That’s enough, Megatron! Stop it right NOW!!
(Ariel then cups her hands to her side, as if to prepare a beam attack.)
Megatron: (Surrounding himself with a red Energy barrier) Not until the Princess lies dead at my feet!
(Megatron then flies over to a cliff, and begins channeling a large concentration of energy.)
Ariel: (Turning into a Super Mermaid) Au…
(Megatron channels the immense energy into his right hand)
Ariel: (Just about finished charging up her attack) …ra…
(Megatron then fires a tiny, but devastating amount of energy at her and the baby)
Ariel: (releasing her energy into a beam) STORRRMMM!!!
(Megatron’s energy blast collides with Ariel’s Aura Storm and his energy ball grows to the size of a small planetoid, and descends down upon Ariel and Kasunianna/Misty)
Ariel: Grrrggghhh!!
Misty: Waaaah!!! Whaah!!! Wahh!!
Megatron: Her Her Her Her Hah Hah Hah Hah!!!! HA HA HA HA HA HA!!! HWRA HA HA HA HA HA HAH!!!
Ariel: He’s too strong. I’m going to need more power!
(Suddenly, she hears a voice in the sky)
Voice: Ariel!
Ariel: (recognizing the voice and in shock, as if hearing a ghost) Mother?
Voice: You’ve handled yourself well, my daughter. I have come to lend you a hand. (It then shows a hollow image of a mermaid greatly resembling Ariel, albeit with olive colored eyes, a triton-esque crown, Gold earrings, a Gold necklace, and a seashell necklace, descending down after materializing. She then levitates near Ariel (since she can’t exactly stand), mysteriously turns into a Super Mermaid, and cups her hands at her side and channels energy.)
Megatron: (looking shocked) …What? …TWO Ariels? …What is going on?!
Ghost of Ariel’s Mom: Aura…
Ariel/Ariel’s Mom: STOOOORRRMMMM!!!
(They then struggle with the energy ball)
Ghost of Ariel’s Mom: Ariel! CONCENTRATE! Are you willing to let him destroy many lifeforms?! We can end this now, but we must work TOGETHER!! (They then begin to repel the giant energy ball)
Megatron: (Fools…) (he then charges a smaller energy orb to fire at the ball) HA HA HA HA HA! YAAH HA HA HA HA HA HA!!
(He fires at the energy ball, and it goes back near them and crashes onto their cliff.)
Megatron: HA HA HA HA! GYAHAHAHAHAHAH!!! HAHAHAHAHA…!
(He then notices that his second energy orb did not get through)
Megatron: What?!
(He then fires more orbs into it, but they seem to be deflected)
Ghost of Ariel’s Mom: TOGETHER!!!!
Ariel/Ariel’s Mom: STOOORRRRMMMM!!!!
(The Aura storm manages to break through the energy ball, and is heading straight for Megatron)
Megatron: NOOO!!!
(He attempts to counter the attack, but his efforts prove futile)
(He then attempts to shield himself, but the beam manages to rip through him)
Megatron: (Consumed in the beam wave) GRRRRAAAAGGGGHHHH!!!!
(After the beam has been released, Megatron is nowhere to be seen, and Ariel, back in her base form, pants from shortness of breath…)
Ariel: …It’s… …Finally… …Over… It’s a shame I had to do it, but if I let him live, he would have killed the princess, and several innocent bystanders would have been in danger…
Ariel’s Mom: Yes, it seems so, however be wary, as he could have survived. I must return to the afterlife, Ariel, be strong… my daughter… (her mother, with some tears, then fades away)
Ariel: (with small tears)… Goodbye, Mother… (her desceased mom fades away completely.)
(Ariel looks at the young Kasumianna)
Ariel: That was my mom, Queen Athena, and that was the first time I saw her since I was an Infant. She died when Pirates attacked us and murdered her on my home planet, Earth.
(Flashes back to a beach with several merpeople)
(Ariel, as a mer-child of almost 3 years of age, is being thrown up in the air by her father, King Triton, when she suddenly notices and gasps in terror.)
(The scene then cuts to a giant galleon, with a Jolly Roger on it. It starts heading towards them)
King Triton: (GO!)
(he grabs some of the kids, including Ariel, and some of the Merpeople evacuate to Atlantica, with the Pirate Ship looming ever closer.)
(Athena then realizes one of her daughters, Attina, is stuck, and therefore cannot escape, she then frees her, and she rejoins her sisters as well as the remaining evacuees to rendeavous with Atlantica).
Ariel: (Although most of us successfully evacuated back to Atlantica, things started turning for the worse as the Pirates begin stealing all of our prized possessions, our instruments… Save one.)
(The Pirates then throw grappling hook devices towards the instruments, fishing them off the rocks, in a sense, and place them onto nets.)
(Athena then notices that they aim for the Music Box, and tries to save it.)
Triton: (noticing that Athena stayed behind) Athena!!
(Athena is about to get the Music box and leave, but the Pirate ship rams the rock that Athena is on, with the last thing we see is her eyes in terror.)
Ariel: (My mom tried to save a birthday present from Dad, a music box, right after saving my sister, Attina, and ended up crushed by the Pirate flagship as a result, losing the music box, and as a result, banning music from Atlantica for almost 10 years.)
(Flash Back Ends)
In one sense, I also had a similar past to you, Princess Kasumianna. Now, I must get you to a safe haven.
(Ariel is about to walk with the baby in her arms to Cerulean city, when she suddenly senses something and stops in her tracks. She then jumps to the side where an energy blast hit her former spot.)
Ariel: What the…! No… It can’t be… he’s still alive!
(She then turns quickly, and lo and behold, Megatron in standing at another cliff with his hand outstretched. He somehow survived the Aura Storm, but it wasn’t unscathed. Parts of his shirt was ripped apart, and his cape is tattered.)
Megatron: …Ariel! Did you really think that combined blast from you and that ghost of your mother was enough to defeat me?! I may have suffered many injuries from it, But I am still very much able to fight!
Ariel: Megatron!? (Great, now it seems as though our troubles have returned! I must dispatch him before he tries to kill the Princess and succeeds in what Giovanni told him to do!) (Ariel then walks up to him and transforms into a Super Mermaid)
Next chapter will come up as soon as I get reviews for chapters 2, 4, and 5. Also, just wanting to warn you, the next chapter might get a little... eh... graphic in terms of violence if you know what I mean.
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Post by pokeria1 on Sept 26, 2008 18:32:12 GMT -5
Well, I'll be more patient (as much as I kinda dislike having to wait even more) for you guys to post a review, but know that I will end up having to repost again and again every month until you DO give a review on chapters 2, 4, and 5 (since, at least on other sites, the time limit to not responding to a thread is a month.). I don't know if Fanfiction has this same rule, but I can't take chances.
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Post by pokeria1 on Oct 26, 2008 12:40:03 GMT -5
I'll continue to BUMP the fanfic (even though, personally, I am sick and tired of having to do this), but you must try and make some time to respond, be it after school, gathering with friends, after church (assuming you go to it, of course), after work, after College sessions, whatever it is, since I have to wait for reviews before I continue (I only posted part 3 without reviews since it was taking far too long, and it's a one time deal.)
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